The Prologue - When to Use One, How to Write One

Do You Need a Prologue?

The points raised above will probably give you a good idea already of whether you really need a prologue. If you're still not sure, then simply ask:

• What if I just call the prologue Chapter 1? Will the story flow smoothly from that point anyway? (If the answer is "yes", ditch the prologue.)

• Do I need to give the readers a fair bit of background information for the story to make sense? (If "yes", the consider doing it in a prologue before the 'real' story starts.)

• Am I thinking of using a prologue just to hook the reader? (If "yes", then ask yourself why you can't do this just as effectively in Chapter 1 anyway. Do you need to brush up on your technique for creating suspense and conflict? Does your plot need revising? Are you starting your story too early?)

Millicent McHarg sat on an iron chair on the patio in the back garden where the Buddha with its green lights resided. She was wearing her winter coat, her grandmother's furs and her felt hat with an ostrich feather. As she said herself, she only wore that particular feather when she was feeling triumphant. Nonetheless she was in a thoughtful mood. Her height, her elegance, her fine-boned features were elegant even in repose.

The funeral was over and she was planning on how to proceed. She looked up at the house with her apartment attached at the side. The lights were already on and the warmth from inside almost drew her in. Then she turned and looked down at the orchard. For a moment she thought there was movement among the trees, but not being given to fanciful thinking she quickly dismissed the possibility of a ghost. She had other things on her mind. She thought of her granddaughters in the main part of the house and she considered the options.

She would write the synopsis of a new book, she thought. She would call it Divine Justice, or maybe Retribution. No, she thought. I will call it Revenge. I will never have it published, but I will use it. My God, but I will give it to him, and watch him read it, and then he'll know. I will people it with real characters, and she ran through the list in her mind: Millicent McHarg grandmother and author, known as Grammer to the children

Maria McHarg her daughter-in-law, known as Mum

Prunella McHarg eldest granddaughter aged seventeen at the start of the story, known as Plumpet

Daphne McHarg middle granddaughter aged fourteen and known as Daffers

Maya McHarg youngest granddaughter, adopted, aged between four and five, known as the Dumpling I'll let them tell the story, Millicent decided. And I'll include Theresa Carmody. She can tell her story too.

It was very cold on the patio and the plan was forming nicely. The door from her apartment into the garden opened, and Waldorf appeared on the step.

"Millie," he called, "are you really sitting out there in this weather? Is that really you?"

"The one and only," she said, which observation pretty much summed her up.

"I thought I saw a ghost," he commented lightly, "down among the trees."

"I think not," said Millicent McHarg. "I doubt that a ghost would dare to hover here."

"Too right," Waldorf replied. A tall thin humorous man, slightly older than Millicent, he talked with a plum in his mouth and was given to wearing a buttonhole, swinging an umbrella and talking in riddles.

"I'm going in to the girls," he told her.

"I'll follow in a moment," she replied. "I'm just putting the finishing touches to a new book."

"I should think you've done enough for one day," he said dryly.

We'll see about that, she thought.

The door closed behind Waldorf and she lifted her head. For a moment she thought she could hear the laughter of her granddaughters coming from the house. She sighed, knowing that she had not heard them laugh like that all Christmas, and that it would be a long time before she could hope to hear them laugh like that again.

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I probably don't need to explain to you why this prologue works so well - but let's examine it in a little more detail anyway.

A Final Test

Before you make a final decision about whether to write a prologue for your book, do this.

Spend some time at the library (or at your bookshelves at home, if they are extensive). Pluck books from the shelves, looking for prologues. Read through at least a dozen. More if you can. The time will be well spent.

Which prologues worked well? Which pulled you into the story? Which cleverly outlined the backstory, getting it out of the way before the story started?

Which dragged? Which didn't need to be there at all? Which were weighed down by the load of the information they had to carry, and bored you? How could they be fixed?

Analysis of published work is an excellent way of deciding what works and what doesn't. You are a reader as well as a writer; you know a lot about what readers like. Make sure you're a writer that gives your readers what they need, as well as what you want.

(c) copyright Marg McAlister

Marg McAlister has published magazine articles, short stories, books for children, ezines, promotional material, sales letters and web content. She has written 5 distance education courses on writing, and her online help for writers is popular all over the world. Sign up for her regular writers' tipsheet at http://www.writing4success.com/